Revise: Start with Verb+ing Compare: Liam realised he had finally been picked for the team when he looked down the list for his name. With: Looking down the list for his name, Liam realised he had finally been picked for the team



Download 28.71 Kb.
Date conversion24.12.2016
Size28.71 Kb.
  • Revise:


Start with Verb+ing


Compare:
Liam realised he had finally been picked for the team when he looked down the list for his name.


With:
Looking down the list for his name, Liam realised he had finally been picked for the team.


  • Consolidate:

Ahhh, writer’s tactics!


By using verb + ing our writer makes the reader feel more __________ _______ with Liam’s feelings. The reader can easily _________ Liam’s _____________ as he looks down the list. The _____ of words in the sentence is effective because the writer ________ the good news until the end!


anticipation withholds imagine order

emotionally involved




Secure:
Write your own withholding information sentences on your whiteboards using the starter words ‘gripping’, ‘clutching’, ‘holding’. Check to ensure you have a main clause and a subordinate clause and that you have used the punctuation correctly.

  • Revise:




Start with Verb+ed!


Compare:
Kylie decided to relax in the jacuzzi because she was tired from the snowboarding.


With:
Tired from all the snowboarding, Kylie decided to relax in the jacuzzi.

  • Consolidate

Ahhh, writer’s tactics!

Perhaps this writer thinks the most _________ information should come first – the fact that it’s snowboarding that has made Kylie tired. The writer is putting the order of events in the ________ in the same order that they happened in ____ ____ – snowboarding first followed by relaxing. ____________ tactics – we like it!

sentence important

Chronological real time

  • Secure:

Try your own chronological sentences beginning with Shocked by…, Angered by… and Delighted by…



Revise:



Start with a Place!

Compare:
A faint low moaning came from beyond the grey misty clifftop path.


With:
Beyond the grey misty clifftop path, there came a faint low moaning.



Consolidate:

Ahhh, writer’s tactics!


This writer wants us to imagine the _______ before s/he builds up more _______ with the description of moaning so s/he puts the place ‘beyond’ first in the sentence. Putting the place first can create the right kind of __________ before introducing any ______ in writing. It’s a good tactic to get your reader into the story and not give away too much too soon!

setting tension atmosphere action hooked

Secure:


Try these place starters:
On Inside Within Outside Throughout
Near Beyond Among Below Beneath To
Towards From Into Out of Off

Revise:




Start with a time!

Compare:
The players were gathered around the team list already.


With:

Already, the players were gathered around the team list.


Consolidate:

Ahhh, writer’s tactics!


This is a great writer’s tactic because by putting the word ‘Already’ at the start of the sentence, the writer is making the players’ ___________ seem very _______ by using this particular ‘time’ word. The ‘time’ word goes first in the sentence to make the reader feel like the ______ is going on right here right ___so the reader feels even more _______.

urgent anticipation now involved action

Secure:

Try these place time at the beginnings of your sentences:


Before During Earlier Later Since
Meanwhile Whenever At + o’clock In + _ hours
Already Till Until Now By + the time…

Revise:






Start with a reason/reservation!

Compare:


Steve really liked hanggliding although he didn’t often get the chance to fly.
With:

Although he didn’t often get the chance to fly, Steve really liked hanggliding.



Consolidate:

Ahhh, writer’s tactics!


Bring on pure sophistication tactics! This writer has ordered this sentence so that the _______ idea comes first - Steve doesn’t get to fly often. Then s/he adds the _______ idea - that Steve likes hanggliding. These positive and negative ideas about the same subject give the impression that Steve would like to go flying more often. This writing is _____ and subtle because it leaves the reader to realise Steve’s disappointment at not being able to fly more often without having to _____ that fact in an _______ (and probably boring) way!

state clever obvious positive negative



Secure:

Try to use some more words to express reservations:


Although Though If Even if Whereas Despite

Explain what the writer has done:



Sequence connectives are used for…
Cause and effect connectives are used to…
Passive sentences are used because…
Active sentences are effective because…
This writer has used lots of modification to…






The database is protected by copyright ©hestories.info 2017
send message

    Main page